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I will give you paradise

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I’ll build you a heaven
A field                                                    with            more     flowers
                                                        Than           lie        on              a
                                                                   

casket


A thousand blooms   basking
In afternoon sun
The               h        a        z      e               s
                                                               i
                                                              f
                                                              t
                                                              i
                                                             n
                                                              g

                                                   t h r o u g h  
a s   i f   t h r o u g h    s o f t    p l u m e s.

The petals will flutter as   t e n d e r   a n d   t h i n
As old human skin,
Dew drops
                                              t e e t e r i n g   o n    t h e    r i m
                                           Like      teeth      on         gum,
                                                           Clinging,
                                                           Wobbling


,




                                                      Falling down with a thrum.

The plum trees coated with flan                     will
                                                                        fan
                                                                    Every
                                                         gnarled
                                                  hand,

The sweet scent        overfl-
                                                    -ow-
                                                                  -ing
Like seething tea from a kettle.


I’ll build you a harbour to settle
Your   p o l y s t y r e n e   bones

A   bench   and an     arbour     – your personal throne
complete with a
                                          cat            d r o w s z z z z i n g
                            on top of your t r o u s z z z z e r s

Her mousy fur in your palm,
Will   m u r m u r   and    l u  l   l

and the melody of her purr will
                                                         t  i  p  t  o  e
                                            fickle  and s  l  u  r r e   d
Like the hum of your pulse.



I will grow in your    E d e n
A grapevine of sin
s
l
i
m

s
p
i                                      limb
n                   delicate
e       and


Sag-
          -ging      and
                                 fee-
                                              -ble:

                                            clusters
                                                 and
                                            clusters
                                                 and
                                            clusters
                                     of chocolate truffles.

c  a  r  a  m  e  l      t  h  r  e  a  d
w  i  l  l  
             s  p  r e  a  d
l i k  e  
           s p i d e r
Ov-                    w e b
    -er-
       -he  ad.


Eclairs will   h
                     a
                     n
                     g    from a   b r a n c h
                                                            o o  o  o  z i n g    
                                                                                    out
                                                                                           custard
As an ulcer leaks lymph you can’t stanch.

And down by your slippers
Dolls, eyes, and pink hair clips
A small girl will complete
All that you need
For your personal
heaven.
   This is a dedication to my grandfather who is one of the most awesome people I know. :love: :love: :love: He's a vet and his long practice with cow shit, horse shit, sheep shit and pregnant cats has not put a blemish on his love for animals.
   He's also a keen gardener and in the summer our garden blooms with so many colors and so many smells! Last year after some mischief on her part my dad took our cat away in a bag and made some town market her new home - my grandpa cried and got a hypertension attack. The next day my dad brought the cat back. Also last year our neighbour chopped our apple tree off because "it was less than 3m away from her fence". My grandpa wept like a baby. 
   He also suffers from diabetes and had a huge ulcer on one of his shins for a whole year. He doesn't cry on birthdays but that wistful look he casts towards the cake is heart-breaking. 
   So these are the themes from the poem explained. And the small girl is of course me - in the shape and form in which he will always see me.

Edit: My grandpa passed away two years after I wrote this poem without ever seeing it. It's one of the biggest regrets of my life that I didn't get to express to him how much I love and admire him. He was and will always be the nicest person I've ever known. He died on a snowy January morning from a massive heart attack while I was at work in the capital, some 300km away. On the 40th day after his death (the day when it's said spirits leave our world) was my university graduation. I'm not very religious but I want to believe that he was still here to witness it. He took great pride in all of my academic achievements and always bragged about them to any guest we had at home. Of course, everyone in my family is proud of those but he also supported my art. He was deeply religious and had me draw him his favourite icon that he had christened and would later show off to people as well.




   Let me know if it's readable and if it flows well to you; if it evoked any emotion and if any parts sound cliche. Mind you, I did intend some contrast and some naive sweetness in it.

   Did I go overboard with typography here? :D Absolutely not! If it wasn't for the late hour and dA giving me trouble with formatting, I'd make it even fancier! 
Just kidding!
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LindArtz's avatar
This. is just so amazing. Honestly, I've not seen anything like it.  The sentiments expressed,...difficult stuff to put to verse; yet you did so with such seeming ease.
I am Sure your Grandfather knew/knows of your love for him. :heart:  I know it would be better for you had you had the chance to tell him when he was still here on earth... But believe it, he knows. And returned that love a hundred times over, I dare say.


You did Not go overboard with the typography at all! :)!   But I have to wonder how difficult it is to do?  I imagine it is? (how long did it take you to type it out that way? )

Really wonderful stuff here, and a treasure of a dedication for your Grandfather; and keepsake to his memory, Dani. :heart:!!